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Angående fanficen jag nämnde tidigare.. Jag tror fan jag lägger
upp hela paragrafen. Är ni masochister (sp?) nog?
He looked out the window of the small office at the top of his
warehouse by the docks at the ship that was currently being
unloaded. This shipment of Italian furniture was going to earn
him a few million upon delivery. They probably needed a few
more dockhands for the next few shipments. Things weren’t
being moved efficiently enough for his liking. He shifted his gaze
further out towards the sea. The full moon was reflected in a
bright shining white circle off the ocean surface. There were
ships moving to and fro, some docking, some leaving. A white
one was moving into the next pier; it was brown and white to
be exact and called the S.S. Artemis after the Greek Goddess
of the moon and hunting, as was indicated by the bust of said
Goddess and the name written on the hull.
Hur skulle man kunna skriva detta bättre? Till och med jag kan.
He looked out of his office window and sighed. The ship that was
currently being unloaded was filled with Italian furniture, and
therefore his next big paycheck. Still, a frown was carved into
his stone features. They would need more hands for the next
shipping, and right now things weren't moving as smothly as he
wanted it to.
His gaze wandered to the full moon, and soon to it's perfect
reflection in the calm sea. A ship moved through the white road
and the perfection shuddered. Looking up at the ship, Tezuka
could see that it was the S.S Artemis. She was named after the
Greek goddess of moon and hunting, and the coincidence almost
made him smile.
Det där drog jag bara ihop nu på bdb, med ett dokument och en
ordlista skulle jag kunna göra bättre. Personligen tycker jag att
min text är bättre, men kanske är jag bara partisk >< Det som stör
mig är att hon lägger in så mycket detaljer som INTE BEHÖVS.
Texten blir nästan pryttlig. Suck. Jaja, jag får väl hålla käften nu :3
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